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FIC: Promise (G)
I just updated Thwarted Fate at fanfiction.net and TFN.


I'm stuck in a major moment in this story and I haven't been able to move past it. So I tried to ease the writing wheels by working on a few of those ficlets I've promised people here and there...



Title: Promise (G)

Characters: Padmé Naberrie. Kitster Banai.

Timeframe: TPM. Canon?

Notes #1: For fialleril: Okay, I want to see something with Padmé and Kitster. How and in what capacity is totally up to you. :D

Notes #2: I tried to make this as close to canon as possible, but it's been a long time since I've watched TPM. (Sacrilege!) So, please accept this in the spirit with which it was intended.









It surprised Padmé just how deeply Ani’s victory moved her and not just because it made the journey to Coruscant and liberty for her people possible. Shmi Skywalker had said that Ani’s victory meant hope to people who had none. People like the slaves on Tatooine; but also people like Padmé, who until now had only realized just how despairing she felt towards her ability to influence the Senate, to save her people from the Trade Federation.

Ani had given her hope. Her heart was full as she knelt down to hug the other little boy whose confidence in his friend had never faltered.

“Good-bye, Kit. Thank you for believing in Ani. Thank you for everything.”

His face was strangely serious when she pulled away, the wide grin he had had at the end of the race had vanished somewhere in their hug. “Miss Padmé, can I ask you something?”

“Sure,” she asked, surprised.

“Please just keep an eye out for Ani, will you?” He blurted out the words, took a deep breath. “He…” his voice broke off, and he cleared his throat twice, “he doesn’t always look after himself. He gets into things and he…” He coughed again and his dark eyes flashed away from her gaze. With a thrill of shock, she realized that he was close to tears. “He just he just keeps going and going and he doesn’t know when to stop. And being a Jedi is great and everything, but Master Qui-Gon won’t –”

“Kit, what are you saying?”

He lifted his chin and looked at her squarely, shining eyes and all. “I know you and Master Qui-Gon are Jedi. Ani told me.”

Padmé frowned, overlooking the erroneous assumption. That had been very dangerous of Ani. He meant well, but it was just a reminder of how much a child he was. What if Kit, in all childish innocence, had given this information to the wrong people?

“Kit,” she said gently. “You shouldn’t tell anyone this. It’s a secret, do you understand?”

He glared at her. “Of course, I understand. Why would I…? Anyway I won’t want to get Shmi into trouble. If anyone knew that Anakin had gone off to be a Jedi, it might be bad for her here.”

Ani going off to be a Jedi… did Ani tell you this?”

Kit glared. “Isn’t that why you and Master Qui-Gon came here? To test him?”

Padmé shook her head, surprised at how completely the boy had misread the situation. “No, Kit. We told you about our ship, remember?”

He shrugged. “I thought that was just a lie,” he said simply, no hint of malice or insult, “to give Wattoo a reason for Ani to race.”

“No, we didn’t.”

He looked disbelieving. Padmé was torn between feeling insulted, amused or just relieved that the moment of near-tears had passed.

“Kit, the race was not a test. We really just had a broken down ship. We’re not taking Ani away.”

“Maybe not now.”

Padmé opened her mouth to deny it and surprised herself at how the words refused to come out.

There was a sad sort of triumph in little Kit’s face. “Please, take care of him,” he said firmly.

Padmé bit her lip. Nodded.

Kit gave her a long, searching look and she could never make up her mind whether he was satisfied with what it was he found. His face didn’t change as he turned from her to join in with the rest of the celebration surrounding Ani. Padmé watched the little blond boy half-turn to his friend, and swing an arm across his shoulder, effectively pulling him into the centre of attention. Kit grinned then, the too-adult seriousness in his face melting into an expression of pure childish glee. All the while, Ani hadn’t paused in his speech, his face vivid with animation as he entertained the gawking crowd, but Padmé thought she could see his back stiffen with confidence as his friend propped up his side. She caught him once looking around, probably for her, and she slipped into the shadows, towards the parts that Jar Jar and Threepio were loading onto the vehicle.

This was their victory. It was also their farewell. She would not intrude.

Like her earlier despair, her attachment to the little boy with bright blue eyes had crept up on her so gradually that she hadn’t realized just how powerful it was until she was confronted with it.

She stood in the fringes and watched them for as long as she could until Jar Jar murmured to her that they had to go.


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ladyaeryn From: ladyaeryn Date: April 24th, 2009 04:24 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, very lovely! :)

I've been enjoying the heck out of Thwarted Fate too, though obviously I'm bad about lurking.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 25th, 2009 01:11 pm (UTC) (Link)
*hugs* I'm flattered that you even have the time/inclination with some of the stuff that's been going on lately. *hugs* Whenever you're ready to comment, I'll be here. In the meanwhile, if it ever inspires you to expand on that post-AotC AU fic, I'll be extremely glad!

P.S. I LOVE your icon! Do you mind if I steal it?

ladyaeryn From: ladyaeryn Date: April 25th, 2009 05:49 pm (UTC) (Link)
*hugs* If anything, my personal drama has made me even more inclined to absorb myself in good fic. ;)

I keep getting ideas for that AU, and adding to the outline, but somehow fashioning a coherent plotline? Eludes me. ;) In the meantime, I've got a crapton of smaller fics near completion I'm trying to get polished up.

The icon's by lipglossing - go ahead. :)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 26th, 2009 09:37 am (UTC) (Link)
Have you thought of changing the format? Instead of a long novella/novel, you could tell the story in a series of vignettes?
ladyaeryn From: ladyaeryn Date: April 26th, 2009 07:43 pm (UTC) (Link)
I have, definitely. There's a part of me that says 'dammit, all you've ever done is vigs, expand your horizons!' But then there's another part of me that says 'girl, you're good at vigs, don't try to fix something that's not broken.' ;)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 26th, 2009 09:39 pm (UTC) (Link)
I think it takes the same degree of creativity/imagination to write either a compelling vignette or an epic. The difference is in staying power and well, it's fanfic, isn't it? It should be comfort writing. It's good and necessary to challenge ourselves now and then but it's just as important to enjoy ourselves. At least, IMHO. :P
sunlit_music From: sunlit_music Date: April 25th, 2009 08:08 am (UTC) (Link)
So sad...

“He just he just keeps going and going and he doesn’t know when to stop.

If that doesn't describe Anakin, I don't know *what* does.


This was their victory. It was also their farewell. She would not intrude.

I found this part rather bittersweet.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 25th, 2009 01:13 pm (UTC) (Link)
I know. He's the living embodiment of a perpetual motion engine. :)

I found this part rather bittersweet.

*sniffs* Thanks. And thanks, btw, for the feedback you gave at TFN. :D
sunlit_music From: sunlit_music Date: April 26th, 2009 02:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
And thanks, btw, for the feedback you gave at TFN. :D

No problem. You're welcome. :)
vanimy From: vanimy Date: April 25th, 2009 11:53 am (UTC) (Link)
Great story out of a seemingly simple plot... You conveyed a lot with little words. As usual, dear, lovely fic. :) And I always love fics from Padmé's POV, especially when they get us some insights into lil' Ani and Padmé's relationship.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 25th, 2009 01:15 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks, dear! I'm glad you like it. There should be more lil' Ani and Padme stories out there. :D

Edited for more icon appropriateness. ;)

Edited at 2009-04-26 09:52 am (UTC)
lazypadawan From: lazypadawan Date: April 25th, 2009 02:58 pm (UTC) (Link)
What a cute story. Kitster definitely has his friend figured out.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 26th, 2009 09:51 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks! He does, doesn't he? :D
fialleril From: fialleril Date: April 25th, 2009 07:01 pm (UTC) (Link)

<33333333333333

Oh, prescient Kitster. You're my favorite kind.

I simply loved this. You had everyone characterized perfectly. TPM Anakin with his child-like optimism and trust even in his situation, Padmé with her well-hidden despair and fear, and especially Kitster, who is much less optimistic than Anakin but always sticks by his friend anyway. I love the fact that he really does have it all figured out, even if he gets some of the details wrong.

In short, I love this fic. And you should totally post it over at neu_beginning, too. (If you feel so inclined, that is.)

Edited at 2009-04-25 07:02 pm (UTC)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 26th, 2009 09:56 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: <33333333333333

Thanks, dear! I was writing from my memory of the post-race scene which isn't very good. It was either this or something from the "Stewing Plots" 'verse but I decided to write something canon-ish for a change.

I do feel inclined. Thanks again. :D
frostbit_sky From: frostbit_sky Date: April 25th, 2009 09:39 pm (UTC) (Link)
Aww I liked it. You got everyone right and I love that Kitster wants Padmé to look out for his friend. <3
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 26th, 2009 09:58 am (UTC) (Link)
Kit is such a great character. I really wish the movies had told us more about his story. I'm glad you liked it. :D
From: betareject Date: April 30th, 2009 12:00 pm (UTC) (Link)
Wow this was incredibly powerful and so well done. I love how mature and yet innocent Kitster is. Its so sad to know the reasons behind his insight, how even at this age he is disillusioned with the dreams that most children have. How he has that foresight that even most adults miss.

I loved too how Anakin really does rely on Kitster's friendship that bit about him gaining confidence when Kitster is near really touched me. That was such a beautiful image. The innocence of it all and the power too. I wonder if Kitster ever knew how important his friendship with Anakin was.

Beautiful job m(_ _)m
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: April 30th, 2009 12:45 pm (UTC) (Link)
It's so sad to know the reasons behind his insight, how even at this age he is disillusioned with the dreams that most children have. How he has that foresight that even most adults miss.

It is, isn't it? He's a child who's never had a childhood. He's sociologically older than some people will ever get to be in their lifetimes.

I loved too how Anakin really does rely on Kitster's friendship that bit about him gaining confidence when Kitster is near really touched me.

I know. There's this scene when Anakin is working on his pod racer when a bunch of kids come over and everyone except Kitster makes fun of Anakin, telling him that he will never finish the race. Kitster is the only one that remains; and he expresses his confidence in Anakin again just before the race.

I also wish they did more with that friendship in the following movies. I'm glad you liked this. Thanks for the feedback!
fialleril From: fialleril Date: April 30th, 2009 10:36 pm (UTC) (Link)
There's this scene when Anakin is working on his pod racer when a bunch of kids come over and everyone except Kitster makes fun of Anakin, telling him that he will never finish the race. Kitster is the only one that remains; and he expresses his confidence in Anakin again just before the race.

That is my favorite scene in the entire movie, I kid you not. :) It's also the root for much of my characterization of Kitster.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 1st, 2009 07:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
hugs kitster.
luminations From: luminations Date: May 1st, 2009 04:52 am (UTC) (Link)
Awwwww! This is a great fic for fialleril :) Kitster's such a little sweetie. An annoyed little sweetie, feeling he's being talked down to or lied to... a very realistically portrayed child's reaction to what he perceives is the truth (and IS in fact, the truth!). Nice!
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 1st, 2009 07:27 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks for the feedback! I find writing children tricky and children like Kitster, who have grown up in their childhood, are even harder.
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