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FIC: Mortal Instruments | 1, Adoption - moonspinner
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FIC: Mortal Instruments | 1, Adoption
Despite every ounce of common sense within me, I have started posting another story Mortal Instruments. *G* Still, I'm writing it in very much the same style as Mirror Darkly - with the odd, hop-from-one-time-to-another, happy-go-lucky way of that tale. And this time, there'll be no sequels! :D

fialleril , our recent discussions inspired this change of heart so I'm holding you personally responsible for this!

Title: Mortal Instruments
Fandom: Star Wars
Main Characters: Palpatine, Padmé.
Summary: Snippets from the life of Padmé Naberrie, ward of Palpatine of Naboo.

Here's the first chapter beneath the cut.




Mortal Instruments

1, Adoption


(3 months)

The small family huddled into each other for protection, father and grandparents instinctively forming a protective circle around the mother, the baby and the little girl.

They oozed fear and desperation and Sidious smiled at the hopelessness of their defiance.

“Kill the spares.”

Like living swords forged from red metal, the Red Gaurds descended on them. A blur of violence and it was over.

The little baby lay in the still warm, still flexible arms of her mother, bawling.

“Bring it.”

She was presented to her new “father”. He stared down at her red face with a benevolent smile.

Slowly, her tears dried as her tiny heart filled with native fear.


TBC

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atanone From: atanone Date: September 18th, 2007 01:49 pm (UTC) (Link)
excited :) :) more?
*hugs*
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 18th, 2007 01:53 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oooh! Feedback! :D

There'll be more tomorrow, promise. *g*
atanone From: atanone Date: September 18th, 2007 06:30 pm (UTC) (Link)
take your time,dear :) I'll wait :)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 20th, 2007 12:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks dear! it took me a day longer than I planned but it's up now. :)
indiefic From: indiefic Date: September 18th, 2007 02:45 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'm thrilled you're starting something new if only because now I'm not lagging a year behind everyone else ;)

I'm confused, of course, but intrigued. *grin*
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 18th, 2007 02:52 pm (UTC) (Link)
I'm confused, of course, but intrigued. *grin*

In many ways, your recent feedback on Mirror Darkly really encouraged me to start posting this. ::hugs::
indiefic From: indiefic Date: September 18th, 2007 03:04 pm (UTC) (Link)
YAY! Glad to be of help especially in light of how much help you give me.

*hugs*

I will, however, take this moment to digress ...

I'm still very confuzzled about why you think I'll want to take back all the things I said about Mirror Darkly after reading Kaleidoscope. I have started reading it and in the interest of deciphering your email ;) I've just been reading without feedbacking until I get to the end. (I promise, I will feedback!!)

I'm only on chapter 7 or 8 right now and while I'm confused, there is absolutely nothing that would make me want to recant anything I said about Mirror Darkly. (Not that I really thought for a second that I would, Mirror Darkly is just so gloriously rich ;)) And I am enjoying Kaleidoscope immensely.

I will be the first to admit I'm not the sharpest tack in the drawer especially when it comes to deciphering literary themes (You mean Moby Dick wasn't just about a whale? wuh?) but can you give me any hints on Kaleidoscope? It seems like there are several concurrent and opposing realities unfolding ... maybe.

Or I could just be dense ;P

Or maybe both.

LOL. And it seems I'm forever hijacking your threads. I really didn't mean to go on and on about Mirror/Kaleidoscope in the Mortal Instruments thread.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 18th, 2007 03:17 pm (UTC) (Link)
Not another word about hijacking! I'm not so anal-retentive that I'd want to label all discussions and put them into their correct boxes. :p


Kaleidoscope is confusing! You're not the only one who's been puzzled by it. If anything, you're part of a solid majority. :D I'm not sure I understand what is going on all the time.

Anyway, it might help if you see it this way: Mirror Darkly is an AU went back and forth between the past and the present a lot. Kaleidoscope doesn't (usually) go back in time (and when it does, it's stated clearly by italics and x years ago, etc). Rather, it jumps from 3 concurrent realities. (Sort of like a kaleidoscope - many mirrors - of AUs). I try to give clues in the chapter titles (Broken is usually based in 1 verse; Inferno in another and everything else in the 'main' one) but sometimes a chapter shows all the events at the same time and things get even more confusing when the (rare) flashback occurs.


Does this help at all or does it make it worse? :D I'll be the first to admit that it was probably too ambitious a project and hence my wish that it had all ended on that final chapter in Mirror. :(
knight_ander From: knight_ander Date: September 19th, 2007 02:22 am (UTC) (Link)
Ah, I knew you wanted to write some insidious Mara Jade fic. Is this it?

Oh, and is this suppose to be some weird drabble with 111 words as the limit?
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 19th, 2007 12:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks but alas, this is not the Mara Jade story. I'm still working on that one. :-P The 111 was just a coincidence. Chapters will vary from short to long.
fialleril From: fialleril Date: September 19th, 2007 03:01 am (UTC) (Link)
Oh, now you're blaming this on me, and I didn't even know about it! I am appalled. Simply appalled. ;)

I have a feeling your dark!Padmé will end up being rather darker than mine. Or maybe it will be only a difference of kind, and not of degree. Either way, I suspect that I'm really going to pity Anakin in this universe. His life can't possibly turn out well. ;)

And you killed Sola in the first chapter! *sobs* I think that may be the most tragic thing about this fic. ;)

P.S. Where's Kitster? *hopeful grin*
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 20th, 2007 07:19 am (UTC) (Link)
I guess I could put Kitster somewhere... *devilish grin*

I'm sorry I didn't tell you! It was a very impulsive story, I promise. I don't know how dark your P will get, but you're right - it'll probably be a difference of kind. Poor Anakin. He never gets any breaks. :D
fialleril From: fialleril Date: September 21st, 2007 10:42 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, please do! I imagine you could do something positively devilish with him. :D

Apology accepted, Captain Naberrie. ;)

Anakin really doesn't get any breaks, does he? But maybe this time he can at least avoid being turned into a human torch...
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 24th, 2007 07:32 am (UTC) (Link)
Apology accepted, Captain Naberrie. ;)

*g* You sure? I was thinking more in line of 'Apology accepted, Captain Banai'. :p

Seriously though, I still haven't figured out a role for Kitster. It's quite hard because in this 'verse, Anakin has very little memory of Tatooine (he left when he was 3) so it's hard to bring in Kit's character.

No, human torch, I promise. I prefer them pretty and evil. :D
fialleril From: fialleril Date: September 24th, 2007 11:56 pm (UTC) (Link)
You sure? I was thinking more in line of 'Apology accepted, Captain Banai'.

Very sure. Because I was channeling Vader with regards to Captain Needa, and while I might rake you over the coals with a Force choke, I would never do that to my beloved Kitster. ;)

Well, Anakin wouldn't necessarily have to remember him, I suppose. But what ever happened to Shmi? Kit could be tied up in that, somehow. (If she's still alive, that is.)

No, human torch, I promise. I prefer them pretty and evil. :D

*sighs* That's what I figured. One of these days, I'm going to challenge you to write good!Anakin who stays good. ;) Just cause I'm not sure if you could actually do it.

Why yes, come to think of it, that was a challenge right there. *innocent face*
in_excelsis_dea From: in_excelsis_dea Date: September 19th, 2007 05:46 am (UTC) (Link)
Ooh, intriguing beginning. "Kill the spares" reminds me of Harry Potter and I wonder who the girl is- though something tells me it's Mara. BTW, the title? At first I thought you had started a Mortal Instruments series fan fic... But then with the Red Guards, I realized it was Star Wars. Anyways, great start and I'd love to read more.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 19th, 2007 12:24 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks for the feedback! Actually I did borrow the phrase from Potter. It's the second time I've used it! :-P

I really tried to come up with another title but Mortal Instruments really captured the theme of this story.
in_excelsis_dea From: in_excelsis_dea Date: September 19th, 2007 11:17 pm (UTC) (Link)
I don't really think it will be a problem, when you post it on SW themed sites and comms and stuff. It's just without any warning of fandom, I was a bit confused at first.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 20th, 2007 07:16 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks. I've fixed that (about the fandom note).
From: ex_suhina987 Date: September 21st, 2007 02:50 am (UTC) (Link)
Woot!
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 24th, 2007 07:27 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks!
r0ck3tsci3ntist From: r0ck3tsci3ntist Date: September 24th, 2007 01:06 am (UTC) (Link)
*just started this*

Whoa Leia!
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 24th, 2007 07:28 am (UTC) (Link)

I really hoped you'd comment! I wanted to see what you thought of this.
r0ck3tsci3ntist From: r0ck3tsci3ntist Date: September 24th, 2007 12:48 pm (UTC) (Link)
I've been behind and really, really focused on my art work these days. I have a new art program and I'm dedicated to learning how to use it - and it's very involved. So I've been a bit out of it.

I commented on your next chapter too. I think you've made an awesome start and I love what you're doing so far.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: September 25th, 2007 07:30 am (UTC) (Link)

How's that going? I hope you're making leaps and strides with your creativity. You're really very talented.

I saw your comments on chapter 2. I'm playing catch up with replies but thanks so much for the feedback! I really appreciate your take on my stories.
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