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FIC: Sibling Camaraderie
The last of the “Stump the Writer” ficlets! Hurray!

Title: Sibling Camaraderie

Characters:
Anakin, Padmé, Obi-Wan, Sola, Dormé.

Timeline:
Sometime during the Clone Wars.

Genre:
Fluffy angst. Angsty fluff?

Notes:
For frostbit_sky: … Padmé and Anakin bond over over-bearing older siblings.






“So you’re saying I should have defied the Jedi Council?” Anakin snapped.

“I’m not saying anything, Anakin,” Obi-Wan said gently, just before he went ahead to contradict himself, “but if I were in your shoes, I would have seriously reconsidered giving my Padawan that assignment.”

“Yes, I remember you holding me back all the time. Forgive me for choosing not to do the same to Ahsoka.”

“Well, we can see how well that turned out, didn’t it?”

Anakin scowled. “That’s not my fault. It was the Council-”

“The Council isn’t Ahsoka Tano’s Master, Anakin. You are.”

/

He had gone to see Padmé the very same hour. They had planned to meet that evening at her apartment but he couldn’t wait. He needed to vent off steam or he might have done something crazy, like lop off his ex-Master’s head with his lightsabre.

“All he seems to do is find fault! Anakin, be more patient. Anakin, you’re too reckless. Anakin, control your Padawan. He thinks he’s still my Master! It’s not fair!”

Padmé’s small hands were wrapped around his own and the sympathy radiating from her seemed to be the only thing holding him down.

“Anakin-”

The flashing neon at her door alerted both of them and they stepped back from each other as the doors slid open.

“It’s Sola, milady.”

Anakin watched with some surprise as his wife’s eyes narrowed. “Is it important?”

“Plans about your father’s birthday, I believe?” Dormé said.

“Please tell her I’ll get back to her later,” Padmé said. As Dormé left, she added sotto voce, “though why she’d care for my opinion, I have no idea.”

“Problems with Sola?” Anakin asked, gently, taking hold of the hand that had suddenly balled up in a fist beside him. He’d have liked to smoothen out the tension that was radiating from her shoulder but they were in her office in the middle of a working day.

“Nothing really,” Padmé murmured, her scowl deepening.

“Oh now, you have to tell me!”

It took some prodding but it finally came out:

/

“So the old building on Cartao was pulled down and we’re trying to recycle the materials for construction of the new facility…”

“Are those the plans for the Refugee Housing Accommodations?” Padmé asked, looking over Sola’s shoulder at the blueprints.

“Yes, dear,” Sola said, rapidly scrolling through the prints.

Padmé tried not to feel slighted. “I raised the Bill for that, you know,” she said mildly.

“Yes, we know, dear. It only took you three months to issue the final draft.”

There was no use ‘trying’. “Well, I was a little busy with fighting the Military Creation Act. Then, you know, the Galactic War broke out.”

“And it never occurred to you that a fall-out from this War would be
more refugees?”

/

Even now the memory was enough for Padmé to turn red in anger and embarrassment. “I wish I could have told her that I’m not stupid, I have been in public office for almost all my life but she made me so mad that I was speechless.”

The pressure on her hand made her look down and she smiled a little at the sight of her own pale fingers intertwined with Anakin’s darker ones. “Sometimes I think she forgets she’s my sister, not my mother. I love her, but there are times when it’s so hard to like her.”

Anakin laughed. She looked up, startled, to see his eyes twinkling. “Like me and Obi-Wan, you mean?”

It took her a moment to get it and then she was laughing herself.



Fin.



I know. The ending leaves a lot to be desired but I really wanted to keep it under 600 words.

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sunlit_music From: sunlit_music Date: May 12th, 2009 01:54 am (UTC) (Link)
This is rather cute, especially the ending.

“All he seems to do is find fault! Anakin, be more patient. Anakin, you’re too reckless. Anakin, control your Padawan. He thinks he’s still my Master!"

*grins* this is actually a good description of Anakin, although I can see why Anakin would be annoyed.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 12th, 2009 07:10 am (UTC) (Link)
I'm glad you liked it! It's not easy for anyone to take criticsm but Anakin gets it harder, especially when it comes from Obi-Wan. :)
fialleril From: fialleril Date: May 12th, 2009 02:11 am (UTC) (Link)
I have this horrible feeling that the "assignment" referred to in the beginning is the one from "Storm Over Ryloth," and you know how that episode freaks me out.

But the rest of the fic is quite nice and light. I think I needed that. :) And I love how Padmé can have spent so much time listening to Anakin complain about Obi-Wan, and apparently never considered before that it's very similar to how she talks about her sister. :D It was fun to see him call her out on that, and great that she didn't respond defensively.

I also love the glimpse of engineer!Sola. :D
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 12th, 2009 07:18 am (UTC) (Link)
What a coincidence! I have no idea what Storm Over Ryloth is about. (I kind of fell behind on the cartoon episodes so I've decided to just wait for the full season DVD).

The assignment was an espionage mission. Think Alias meets Clone Wars.

I think Padmé and Anakin are like most people in that they find it very hard to take personal criticism but can be sympathetic when it’s directed to others. So even though, Padmé gives the nice speech about "it's the only way we grow" to Anakin in AotC, I think that blindspot can still be part of her personality.

engineer!Sola FTW. :D While P & co make their wars and policies, she's busy getting her hands dirty with the real work.

Edited at 2009-05-12 07:19 am (UTC)
fialleril From: fialleril Date: May 12th, 2009 03:31 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, well then! It's vague enough that it fits in nicely with that episode (which is full of all sorts of very creepy child soldier undertones). In fact that episode creeps me out so much that I might actually be slightly more comfortable with the idea of an espionage mission.

And just in case I came across wrong in my comment, I didn't mean the creepy factor as a criticism of the fic! It creeps me out that Anakin would send his padawan on missions like that, but it's totally compatible with canon, and I like the disturbing hints you dropped at the beginning. But then you know how I feel about Jedi child soldiers.

I absolutely love that little blind spot in Padmé. You write it well, and it's nice to read something that acknowledges her faults - so much of fic either puts her on a pedestal or demonizes her for no good reason. This was very refreshing!

*whispers* Is it bad that I was kind of tempted to agree with Sola in this fic, though?

The world needs more engineer!Sola fic, clearly.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 12th, 2009 07:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
Sometimes I think they invented Ahsoka's character to rub in the creepy child solider undertones. (Although the entire Order and it's "ten year olds are too old to be recruited" stinks of creepy child soldier undertones).

I knew you weren't. I was just clarifying that I haven't watched so many episodes of the Clone Wars, including this one.

Sola is always in the right. *g*

The world needs more engineer!Sola fic, clearly.

Or academic!Sola fic. Or lawyer!Sola fic. Or even strictly home-maker!Sola fic. The world just needs more Sola fic.
fialleril From: fialleril Date: May 13th, 2009 12:30 am (UTC) (Link)
Well, sadly, having watched a few of the commentaries on the episodes I can safely say that the creators of this show have no idea what they've wrought with Ahsoka. In fact, they seem to think she's a pretty great hero and role model, with her only squicky issue being a tendency to a temper.

The child soldier undertones are most definitely there, but they're not there by the intention of the creators. Makes me very glad I don't subscribe to the "author as locus of meaning" theory, or I would have had to have given up on this show in a great rage long ago.

You are so right! The world does need more Sola fic in general! And I need some Sola plotbunnies! Hmmm...

In the meantime... *encourages your Sola muse*

Edited at 2009-05-13 12:31 am (UTC)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 13th, 2009 06:25 am (UTC) (Link)
Well, sadly, having watched a few of the commentaries on the episodes I can safely say that the creators of this show have no idea what they've wrought with Ahsoka.

Why am I not surprised? *eyeroll*

I don't subscribe to the "author as locus of meaning" theory

Accidental ingenuity seems to be rule rather than the exception these days.

emavalexis From: emavalexis Date: May 12th, 2009 05:36 am (UTC) (Link)
Aww, I love this! Great job giving a side-by-side comparison of sorts between Anakin and Padmé's own family relationships. Well done. :)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 12th, 2009 07:19 am (UTC) (Link)
Thanks, dear! I'm glad you liked it. I wish there were more Naberrie family stories in the EU. Although, who knows? That might just be a blessing in disguise.
frostbit_sky From: frostbit_sky Date: May 13th, 2009 03:22 am (UTC) (Link)
Thank you so much *hugs* I love it.

I love seeing Anakin having to point out the similarities between their relationships. And I could so hear the characters say those lines clearly in my head.

And yay for Sola/Padmé sister fic. Not enough out there.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 13th, 2009 06:14 am (UTC) (Link)
I'm glad you do, dear. *hugs*

And I could so hear the characters say those lines clearly in my head.

Yah! That's one of the nicest things you can say about a fanfic. :D


And yay for Sola/Padmé sister fic. Not enough out there

So true. I should remedy that...
frostbit_sky From: frostbit_sky Date: May 14th, 2009 03:52 am (UTC) (Link)
So true. I should remedy that...
I would like that. :)
vanimy From: vanimy Date: May 15th, 2009 05:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
Very nice fic! I too liked the way Padmé was described. We tend to make her too perfect sometimes. It's only natural even she doesn't like being annoyed by her sister. Makes her more real. ;) And any fic from you is always a great thing. ;)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 15th, 2009 09:24 pm (UTC) (Link)
But she is perfect in this fic ... perfectly annoyed by her sister. :P :P Glad you liked it, dear.

Talking about imperfect Padmes... when you should I expect the next installment of SG? *pokes* *prods*
vanimy From: vanimy Date: May 17th, 2009 04:33 pm (UTC) (Link)
You're such a sweetheart for asking... *sigh* I've been completely plagued by writer's block lately. Not the usual writer's block unfortunately, I literally don't know what to do with the story. I hope the inspiration comes back... :( I think the lack of reviews on TFN doesn't help either (yeah, I'm weak... :(). You'll be the first to know when I start writing again, you know that. ;)
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 17th, 2009 04:49 pm (UTC) (Link)
Well, if you'd like to discuss story points, you know I'm always here for you. *hugs* Try not to let the lack of reviews get you down. They usually come back once the story picks up again. Maybe you could try piling up the updates so they could come more frequently? Sometimes readers wonder off if the wait between updates is longer than expected. It happened to TF.
vanimy From: vanimy Date: May 17th, 2009 05:03 pm (UTC) (Link)
You're probably right... Now if I could only go back to writing at all... *sigh* I'll write to you if I have doubts, thank you... :) Speaking of TF, you have done a terrific job with going on with it. It's hard to think there ever was a break. I wish there were more reviews for TF actually!
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 17th, 2009 05:25 pm (UTC) (Link)
*hugs* Thanks, dear. I thought I had given up a long time on getting more reviews for TF, but I have to confess that sometimes it still gets me a bit down. *sighs* But I am grateful for what I do get. :D
sunnyskywalker From: sunnyskywalker Date: May 24th, 2009 05:29 pm (UTC) (Link)
I can so see Sola saying that :D It's great to see Padmé being the little sister she is for once! And bonding with Anakin over being the younger sibling.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 24th, 2009 05:46 pm (UTC) (Link)
I really like the idea that regardless of how legendary Amidala is, she still gets cut down to size at home. :D :D
sunnyskywalker From: sunnyskywalker Date: May 28th, 2009 12:14 am (UTC) (Link)
They changed her diapers and put up with her terrible twos :D
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 28th, 2009 06:48 am (UTC) (Link)
And you just know that precocious Padmé would have been a handful!
sunnyskywalker From: sunnyskywalker Date: May 28th, 2009 09:52 pm (UTC) (Link)
Most definitely! She probably learned all the variations of "No" quite early :D And if I could debate the merits of spanking with my parents at five (spanking is hitting, hitting is not allowed, therefore spanking is not allowed) at five, I bet Padmé had all sorts of excellent arguments for why she could too have another cookie and not take a nap as soon as she could talk.
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 29th, 2009 08:54 am (UTC) (Link)
OMG, you were a Padmé! :P :P

She not only had excellent arguments, that was probably the amendment to the Naboo constitution she proposed when she joined up the Junior Legislatures when she was 6. :P Although she lost narrowly, 77 to 82, it paved the way for the No Limit on Ice Cream Bill which was unanimously accepted. *g* *g*
sunnyskywalker From: sunnyskywalker Date: May 29th, 2009 06:44 pm (UTC) (Link)
The No Limit on Ice Cream Bill was an important step in gaining children the right to have a say in their own nutrition. After all, if they can't experiment with different meal plans, how will they learn? XD
moonspinner From: moonspinner Date: May 30th, 2009 10:14 am (UTC) (Link)
Centuries later, Naboo historians will debate whether it was this Bill and all the radical changes it precipitated, rather than her retake of Naboo during the Trade Federation Invasion, that inspired so many young legislators to attempt to amend the constitution to make her a permanent ruler. :p
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